The trip to Napier

The trip to Napier

It felt like our trip to Napier was going to take forever. In the distance I could could see frosty white mountains with snow falling on top of it. Glaring out the left window at the lush green forests; within seconds hail fell from the sky frantically hitting our car with brute force but just as fast as it had began it was over!!!. The rest of the ride wasn’t so bad.

We had done it! We finally arrived the ride that felt like it would be going on forever was over. We had made it to park island. glancing to the right I saw the Napier under 11 boys warming up along with Mt Wanganui we were going to face each team in a football.
game what would be the outcome of this game

Writing Report

One of my strengths is organisation, my reasons are I have writing grouped in basic paragraphs and the ideas are organized to make the story make sense. Another strength of mine is vocabulary because I am able to select words to enhance the meaning or mood.

Goals
At the start of the year my goals were punctuation; it is now even with others. My current goals are now  ideas and language/structure, I’m going to improve on them the same way I did with my goals at the beginning of the year. I will go to workshops related to my goals and practice them.

Example 

Prediction of the ghost of young nicks head.
I woke up and glared to my right and saw Eddie dozing away; wondering about the suspicious man and how he knew how to escape?.

At long last Eddie woke up, we then bolted down stairs to explore the caves once again. Joe was alarmed about going back to the cave where they almost died, while they were walking along the cliff they countered the suspicious man again, “what’s your name sir” he didn’t answer. Within the blink of an eye he was gone.

Suddenly the clouds engulfed them that hadn’t stopped the boys, “ code five in the commando rule book keep going” Eddie explained. Are they going to make it home this time?.

Prediction of the ghost of young nicks head

Prediction of the ghost of young nicks head.

I woke up and glared to my right and saw Eddie dozing away; wondering about the suspicious man and how he knew how to escape?.

At long last Eddie woke up, we then bolted down stairs to explore the caves once again. Joe was alarmed about going back to the cave where they almost died, while they were walking along the cliff they countered the suspicious man again, “what’s your name sir” he didn’t answer. Within the blink of an eye he was gone.

Suddenly the clouds engulfed them that hadn’t stopped the boys, “ code five in the commando rule book keep going” Eddie explained. Are they going to make it home this time?.