I woke up and glared to my right and saw Eddie dozing away; wondering about the suspicious man and how he knew how to escape?.
At long last Eddie woke up, we then bolted down stairs to explore the caves once again. Joe was alarmed about going back to the cave where they almost died, while they were walking along the cliff they countered the suspicious man again, “what’s your name sir” he didn’t answer. Within the blink of an eye he was gone.
Suddenly the clouds engulfed them that hadn’t stopped the boys, “ code five in the commando rule book keep going” Eddie explained. Are they going to make it home this time?.
I liked that it was what joe was thinking not just somebody narrating it.
ReplyDeleteThat little piece of writing was very adventurous and it makes you want to read on.
Do you think that they will really go to the caves and see the creepy man again or will you change your mind.
Great question I'm thinking that they might go back to the cave or run into the man again.
DeleteKia ora, I really liked the way you were able to add another post during the week by yourself. You used some powerful words like suspicious and glared in your writing. Have you ever been to Young Nick's Head?
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Mrs Torrie
Nice comment and yes I have we went two years ago, it was very fun.
DeleteI liked that you used powerful words in the story it made me excited to hear more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Leo I was trying to use lot's of powerful words because when I wrote this piece it was my weakness. what is your goal in writing?
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